
One of the memoirs that I had are all with one car and that is my car. I remember when I first got the little car one of my neighbor john said ,that the car was for sale. I was happy that it was for sale and my dad was thing of buying it and he said that he will buy it and he will not be a mad person to not sale it to us and the next day. He bought the car then my dad was happy he was doing work on it. When my dad found out that his friend had rims he bought them. I saw that the car was come up the engine was new and the inside of the motor there are two rotors that spin in different directions so that means that it goes faster and the motor can be for more thing in the street and I go to car shows and it. I that car show the car said that my car was bad just that the paint was no good and that they want my dad to join the team call the R-POWER car club. The guy that own the title r-power said if you go and do same thing what the title r-power you will get kick out and get the car to the trash and you will say yes too all. The man was not the happy kind and the time was pasting and john was been nice the man was better now for the good part and the people started talk to us and the people name I can not say there names they started to tell my dad Cali that is a nick name that was good a my car started to look good every day the people would said Damn that car is good and the people were saying that Cali is not that bad. I felt good and they that same people ask me if you like that car I say yes, I LOVE THAT CAR. Icant wait to drive the car.Oh i almost fogot that I will see you in the streets hondas!!!!
20 comments:
Edgar,
Your story needs a lot of editing. You should read it over and make corrections and then re-publish it to the blog
This story shows that you learned lessons about hard-work, the importance of earning respect, and how to build a good reputation from your father. I like to see that you recognize that pride comes from doing your best at something.
I hope to see your car someday!
Mr. McConnell
YEAH I LIKE UR STORY YEAH RIGHT SCOOBY _ DOO 13!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wow you got a really good story
it is really interesting,i really liked it
it's not boring keep it up
LUIS CARDIEL
YEAH!!!!!!!!
YOUR STORY SOUNDS REALLY INTERESTING
CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT THE CAR LOOKS LIKE
YEAH!!!!!!!!
YOUR STORY SOUNDS REALLY INTERESTING
CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT THE CAR LOOKS LIKE
LUIS CARDIEL
YEAH HULK
LOVE YOUR STORY
LUIS CARDIEL
I THINK YOU SHOULD READ YOUR STORY AGAIN
AND MAKE SOME CORRECTOINS
LUIS CARDIEL
SORRY BUT YOU MADE A FEW MISTAKES
BROTHER
LUIS CARDIEL
good for u frm:Briana
You need to check your story . From:Evelyn
J/K From:Evelyn
good from:cali
I like your story EDGAR
from :Briana
Edgar,
Seriously reread your story because you made some errors but otherwise your story was awesome hope to see your car one day.
Beatriz Perez
CORRECTOIN that what u need
yuri
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